Friday, January 19, 2007

silence

Talking on the phone hours passed
And you insisted
That you don’t know how to talk on phone
May be you don’t!
We talked of things that are near and far
We talked of time we spent in the car
We talked of moments that brought us close
We talked of moments that were full of remorse
Though connected by the two receivers
And a network of wires
I could feel the distance
That technology tried to bridge
But as the talks subsided
And both of us quietened
As silence surrounded
I could hear your breath
I found you so near
Could almost touch you
And we lay there
In each others arms
Surrounded by silence
Connected by two receivers
And a network of wires
.

4 comments:

Anonymous said...

hi richa phone conversation is well scripted i think u could add some more moments :
We talked of things that are near and far
We talked of time we spent in the car
We talked of moments that brought us close
We talked of moments that were full of remorse
its too soon to wind up things ur MOMENTS COULD CREATE MAGIC IN THE POEM
AM I WRITE OR WRONG !!!!

Anonymous said...

dont go by above suggestion ever... a poet knows where to put stop... how much only is required to be said.
This i seriously think can make a good song. someone plese try! magic may be created that way.

namita said...

a beautiful thot xpresd so subtly!!
i knw silenc can definitely convey wat words fail 2 convey...

i promise i'll visit ur blog regularly,, add on stuff more often..

Shesh said...

Very intense, and full of longing...the plethora of emotions so beautifully and honestly captured...lagey raho! And thanks for visiting my blog as well...
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